Help needed. How can I improve my story?!?

Your ideas are good, but a little groggy...I believe I see where you are going with this but you need to make your point more clear in a prologue. Accordingly, your writing lacks transition words between and at the beginning of sentences. Writing in first person seems to hold you back. Until you have a complete mastery of third person you should keep writing in third person. Overall though, not bad, keep editing.